tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3028902712658025433.post7072594286499377619..comments2024-02-14T08:46:04.714-06:00Comments on "Stoopin It" In the Suburbs: Young Love-Formal First PersonLaura Rogershttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04484480915813337237noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3028902712658025433.post-60580915947251651212012-06-23T18:04:11.829-05:002012-06-23T18:04:11.829-05:00Sorry for your lost, Laura ... My heart sadden whe...Sorry for your lost, Laura ... My heart sadden when I read this ... Sigh! Hang on to those fond memories ...Journey of Lifehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14814279353807130008noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3028902712658025433.post-40466768235060449942012-06-23T00:21:15.721-05:002012-06-23T00:21:15.721-05:00Really,really sorry.I don't have words to expr...Really,really sorry.I don't have words to express my sympathies.May God give you courage!lailahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09035262411554749000noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3028902712658025433.post-54040619089891960902012-06-21T18:18:53.391-05:002012-06-21T18:18:53.391-05:00Laura,
I miss him too, more than I than words can...Laura,<br /> I miss him too, more than I than words can convey. He was one of the best men I have ever known. He was like a brother to me and his loss has touched many. RIP Bill and I will see you when it's my time. Wow, will we have a lot to catch up on.<br /><br />Linda (Twinner)Laura Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04484480915813337237noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3028902712658025433.post-45118509527630616722012-06-21T18:09:10.153-05:002012-06-21T18:09:10.153-05:00Thanks Sandra....I agree.Thanks Sandra....I agree.Laura Rogershttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04484480915813337237noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3028902712658025433.post-66052932242172034822012-06-21T15:37:42.256-05:002012-06-21T15:37:42.256-05:00Gosh, hard to comment on this one; clearly so clos...Gosh, hard to comment on this one; clearly so close to you and painful. I’ve known my own similar losses. Well, not of a lover, but of a dear friend and then a relative, both who died suddenly, and far too young. <br /><br />Anyway, as to the prompt:) I would say, because this is so emotionally laden, it really is more “close” than “formal.” Doesn’t finally matter, as long as the voice is consistent one way or the other. To me, this is close because it sounds more spoken – sentence fragments here work because they convey the intensity of emotion: “Clean, sensual and soft were his lovely kisses.” And phrases such as “something of heaven” are the abstract, and thus very much heard more than “seen,” if that makes sense….? <br /><br />If you were to rewrite this, I’d stay with the “close” perspective, but add more details so we can see Billy, as well as you. Your surroundings etc. All that would make this moment all the more immediate and thus all the more memorable to the reader. Thanks for linking up, and come back to see if there are others who might link up tonight!Sandra Tylerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13191775335774130719noreply@blogger.com